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i want to be long lasting in your life
like the tissue you pulled out ot its packet
and now you can’t put it back in
i want to be helpful
like the needle you attach to your bikini
for the case of cramp while swimming
i want our time to be in a sandglass
a sandglass that is stuck already
i want to pop up in your hardest time
with ice blocks in my hand
to freeze up your hell
i want to freeze it up for you
when it says “drink cold please”
i want to follow you
even into that whole
that a snake cant pass through
look at me !
i can carve these eyes if they won’t look at you
i don’t need these hands if they won’t touch you
these legs can stuck if you won’t wait for me
and the smoke can fuck my lungs up
cause this heart won’t beat if you don’t love me!
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:iconledyba:
Good expressions in this poem, nice work!
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:iconverybigbonedvirtuoso:
thanks a lot
enjoy poetry
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:iconledyba:
You are welcome, and it's great to enjoy poetry. :wave:
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:iconinnerchild01:
You got your poem featured in a very cute journal.
Very powerful poem indeed.
Your green bird is lucky;)
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:iconphyllipa:
*Phyllipa Sep 19, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, I wasn't sure if I liked this at first but that ending really did it for me
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:iconverybigbonedvirtuoso:
ah. this poem is really old and not a piece that makes me feel proud or talented . thanks for spending time on reading !
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:iconraining-faith:
lovely. here have a cookie for your effort :cookie:
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:iconverybigbonedvirtuoso:
cookie? im already as fat as a female bear . thanks still
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:iconraining-faith:
i wasnt referring to your size....i just like cookies
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